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Old 07-06-2009, 02:08 AM   #11 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by Grieves View Post
The illusions of obsessive actions(smoking, drinking, fishing) with no real resolution or conflict lead me to not care at all...Like hyper said, it is bland, and leaves no lasting feeling of anything but uncertainty of whether you should really care or not...

Stories, yes even short stories, need an intro, character development, a conflict, resolution and conclusion and yours is nothing more than an intro to a story that never develops...
kinda being a dick about it but thanks i guess. gotta work on making people care about my story but i dont think that you should have to stick to popular conventions of writing, especially when it comes to flash fiction.

"For sale: baby shoes, never worn." - Hemmingway (he claimed this to be a story. perhaps you disagree.)
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