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Old 10-16-2009, 09:40 PM   #9 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by kiLLeRrrr View Post
Killing and slaugtering, I cry myself to sleep.
The dreams of you I wish I could reap,
only soak in more and more as months go by.
But now it's time for this to die.

I guess this is what they meant,
when they say your childhood should be well spent.
So you wouldn't fall for life's cruelest lies.
I can only reach the beginning of the skies,

but I'll get over you and I will stop the kills.
I'll ride away, never turn back, and keep pedaling these wheels.

Life is only hard when you have no companion,
Jumping shit like canyons,
I've found a true love.
Once again, I'll strap on this glove.

And set sail into the city, with tired legs.
Riding on tires, grinding on pegs.

You'll see us no more,
me and my bike,
don't need you, you fucking dyke

a couple is basically what you did, AA BB rhyme scheme. so kudos on that. i'm just criticizing the breaks. if you're going to rhyme in a couplet method you out to group the line breaks in 4's and 2's accordingly. and you can end with the 3, that's fine. there are no set rules, per se.
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