lol... whatever don't thank me. i know you could care less. but i do love poetry and i think i can improve your pentametere. there should be 5 per line, if i'm not mistaken.
if you'll allow me to fiddle with your work a bit...
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Originally Posted by kiLLeRrrr
Killing and slaugtering, I cry to sleep.
The dreams of you I wish I could reap,
they soak in more as months go by.
But now it's time for this to die.
seems this is what they meant,
your childhood should be well spent.
you wouldn't fall for life's cruelest lies.
I only reach the beginning skies,
To get over you, I will stop the kills.
I'll ride away and pedal these wheels
Life is hard when you have no companion,
Jumping this shit like gaping canyons,
I've found a true love.
I'll strap on this glove.
Set sail to the city with tired legs.
Riding on tires; grinding on pegs.
You'll see us no more,
me and my bike,
don't need you, you fucking dyke
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