i agree, your wording is much more concise
i remember the first time i shroomed, i was looking at the soil and all the leaves and twigs and stones laying there at my feet. I realized then that there is no isolation. everything is connected, i could actually see a lacey web connecting everything and myself, and i could feel it. I struggled for so long to put that feeling into words, but i feel like now i know that the feeling as god. i called it the inbetween for a long time.
shameless poetry plug:
"it isnt hard to feel the warmth
when the sun shines on your heart
you can taste the sweetness of the sky
and feel the freedom of flight
inhale the fresh feeling of life
exhale worry and pain
not a thing to lose
and a great deal to gain.
and if you listen closely,
you may hear a perfect melody
sung unto you, about you
for everyone to enjoy.
its everything but not
call it the inbetween.
the place where we all connect
its the light filtering through;
the shadows cast.
beautifully balanced on the non-existent edge,
ill wait until I am you,
where nothing ends and it all begins.
words dilute my hearts intention"