Disheveled Order

Mafoo · 09-07-2008, 06:38 PM

im over under and beside myself.
im this and that, these and those, black and white, up and down.
clearly opaque, generally particular, extremely moderate.
quiet cacophony, the sober inebriate.
im disheveled order stopped at a sprint on the glass ceiling.
I am not.
I am a vanishing act. shinning like asphalt to plunge my hand into my shallow mind.
I retrieve retrievers recapping the state of reverie but we dance for salt,
pennies and dust.
i am severe, im several states of matter but not a one of them does.
im soiled; terracotta, taking root in potash, the basis for insanity.
focused diffusion pointed aimlessly speeding directly to anywhere.
speeding to a stop.

my_scatterheart · 09-07-2008, 06:40 PM

I really fucking love this

Smaerd · 09-07-2008, 07:01 PM

pretty gnarly! I like it because it flows like illiteration(s.p.), but speaks in opposites thus explaining it's title. Pretty beutiful piece you wrote up right there, I need to start writing again.

09-07-2008, 06:38 PM	#1 (permalink)
Mafoo nice daze Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: a crazy place called my mind Posts: 1,455 Thanks: 77 Thanked 70 Times in 59 Posts	Disheveled Order im over under and beside myself. im this and that, these and those, black and white, up and down. clearly opaque, generally particular, extremely moderate. quiet cacophony, the sober inebriate. im disheveled order stopped at a sprint on the glass ceiling. I am not. I am a vanishing act. shinning like asphalt to plunge my hand into my shallow mind. I retrieve retrievers recapping the state of reverie but we dance for salt, pennies and dust. i am severe, im several states of matter but not a one of them does. im soiled; terracotta, taking root in potash, the basis for insanity. focused diffusion pointed aimlessly speeding directly to anywhere. speeding to a stop. __________________ PLUR "Knowledge speaks, wisdom listens" Hendrix "A gentle answer turns away wrath, But a harsh word stirs up anger"- words to live by

09-07-2008, 06:40 PM	#2 (permalink)
my_scatterheart Today, I am alive. Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: NJ Posts: 285 Thanks: 31 Thanked 40 Times in 30 Posts	I really fucking love this __________________ You are beautiful.

09-07-2008, 07:01 PM	#3 (permalink)
Smaerd observations kill me Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Vagrant Status Posts: 2,049 Thanks: 259 Thanked 346 Times in 254 Posts	pretty gnarly! I like it because it flows like illiteration(s.p.), but speaks in opposites thus explaining it's title. Pretty beutiful piece you wrote up right there, I need to start writing again. __________________ Peace, Love, Unity, Respect.

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