Sir-Ex

HA! I wrote this in about 10 minutes about 40 minutes ago and I spent the last half hour recording it, now it's online, and I'm sharing it, WHETHER YOU ENJOY MY VOICE OR NOT!


I'm just excited I finally got a new preamp and can record again.

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Ditch the cigs!!!!!!

Mafoo

nice! you play the drums too?? im really impressed man, i thought that sounded really good!!

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For once you have tasted flight you will walk the earth with your eyes turned skywards, for there you have been and there you will long to return

Cambium

Nice sound Sir-Ex!

Sir-Ex

Thanks man I'm glad you enjoyed it.
The drums are the part of the song I can't take credit for, it's just a drum loop I found online. But I'm buying myself a set in a few months and sooner than later I'll have finally learned each of the primary rock instruments: guitar, bass, keyboard.. drums.

In the meantime I'm working on an acoustic solo album just for fun. Maybe make a myspace page for it. I've got a midi keyboard so I'll get to experiment with a bunch of nifty sounds to flesh it out a bit. I dunno how it'll end up sounding, but that's all part of the fun of making music. Tonight I'm gonna take a bunch of mushrooms and start experimenting

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Mafoo

no shame in using a drum sample, imo. i really like the whole thing, the vocals sound nice and i think the guitar part is really chill.

good job, keep em comin

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Cambium

I listened to some of the other ones, send a shout out when you have a cd together.

HTAM

Wow, I really like the idea that you developed.
Little Jack Johnson there, little Krang's Android Body (if you haven't listened to the whole album he did, I would recommend it. I think you'd like it based on this song) in some of the vocals.

The whistling is nice, not overdone, almost counterpoint. I like the duality and metaphor in your lyrics especially the part about cats and dogs and men and women. You might want to move the guitar forward in the mix, or send it to one side of the mix and add a second guitar that is just chords that are strummed and left to ring behind your vocal track and the main guitar. It might fatten the sound up and separate the guitars from the center of the mix.

I would keep the drum beat as a scratch. If you're interested in considering other ideas, I would suggest backing the drums out of the track for few bars using a simple fill as a segueway. Just to break up the rhythm a little. What my ear is hearing is two voices competing on the beat. You and the drums. When your vocals are introduced, it sounds like 'choppy' in that you're not exactly on the downbeat. When you relax your phrasing I think it flows better. It also sounds like you are not taking full advantage your diaphragm. I know of some good breathing exercises if you are interested.

But, really the you know what I think the best thing about this is? You posted it for everyone to listen to and give feedback about. I am so much of a fuckin' perfectionist, that I constantly come up with new excuses about why a track isn't 'quite ready'...

So, overall, you have a very structured foundation to work with. The length of the song is ideal, and it falls into a genre that has been and still is popular. If this were a hot rod, I would say that it's ready for paint, dude. Well done.

The Rev

Cool, man. I used to record songs long ago. Your stuff is alot better, tho. (More tasteful as well).



The Rev

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