First serious job lead in forever - Page 3

Bearsy · 04-05-2011, 11:36 AM

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Originally Posted by my_scatterheart

I don't think you should omit the HS bit at all, it's definitely valuable if you're going after a job where it's pertinent, for sure ... but I would be more inclined to say something like "I attended ___ HS, focusing on Architectural Engineering".

Yeah good point. Saying I have a major is kind of being douchey about it.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mikey

So when do you meet with the guy?

Haven't heard anything yet, but it's only been 2 days.

Sir-Ex · 04-05-2011, 01:34 PM

Heh yeah maybe if you get hired they'll think it's funny and your nickname will be Major, Major Bearsy - or whatever your first name is.

adventure · 04-05-2011, 03:18 PM

Still sounds like a bad ass high school!

aft3rsh0kk · 04-05-2011, 04:43 PM

gluck bearsy

tedkennedy · 04-06-2011, 07:50 PM

you should take puffman's advice about sentence/paragraph structure. generally when you are writing anything formal you should organize your ideas into separate paragraphs, its looks more professional, even if it is just an email. for example you use the first paragraph to introduce yourself and your purpose, second email to talk about work history/education, third paragraph to wrap it up.

other than that it looks ok, its expected for an entry level job you are going to get people who don't have much work experience. demolition sounds like fun work, i would be salvaging tons of stuff for my own use, i love smashing shit and collecting materials for my own projects! good luck getting the job!

Captain Cannabis · 04-06-2011, 08:08 PM

one thing i learned about emails: when i got a blackberry i started to notice that people were responding better to all of my emails. blackberry automatically does all of the capitalization. a little bit of structure and polish goes a long way to make an impression, since the person can't actually see anything about you other than the way you write.

keep it super formal in emails when you are dealing with important business.

Rubix · 04-07-2011, 12:20 AM

I use Regards in salutations too

04-05-2011, 01:34 PM	#42 (permalink)
Sir-Ex Learner Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Edmonton, Alberta Posts: 11,416 Thanks: 1,726 Thanked 3,821 Times in 2,258 Posts	Heh yeah maybe if you get hired they'll think it's funny and your nickname will be Major, Major Bearsy - or whatever your first name is. __________________ Smile Ditch the cigs!!!!!!

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adventure Adventure its good Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Upstate NY Posts: 4,742 Thanks: 1,852 Thanked 1,467 Times in 1,093 Posts	Still sounds like a bad ass high school! __________________ Coming Full Range

04-06-2011, 07:50 PM	#45 (permalink)
tedkennedy now 14% blacker Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 3,229 Thanks: 71 Thanked 585 Times in 364 Posts	you should take puffman's advice about sentence/paragraph structure. generally when you are writing anything formal you should organize your ideas into separate paragraphs, its looks more professional, even if it is just an email. for example you use the first paragraph to introduce yourself and your purpose, second email to talk about work history/education, third paragraph to wrap it up. other than that it looks ok, its expected for an entry level job you are going to get people who don't have much work experience. demolition sounds like fun work, i would be salvaging tons of stuff for my own use, i love smashing shit and collecting materials for my own projects! good luck getting the job! __________________ matthew munari

04-06-2011, 08:08 PM	#46 (permalink)
Captain Cannabis safety word: more Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: m.i.a. Posts: 13,922 Thanks: 2,705 Thanked 3,174 Times in 1,812 Posts	one thing i learned about emails: when i got a blackberry i started to notice that people were responding better to all of my emails. blackberry automatically does all of the capitalization. a little bit of structure and polish goes a long way to make an impression, since the person can't actually see anything about you other than the way you write. keep it super formal in emails when you are dealing with important business. __________________ fuck the monkeys

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