my new song

Black · 11-08-2009, 02:55 PM

please tell me what you think, any feedback is appreciated.
im aware the intro is long, i dont care thats how i want it

Waves · 11-08-2009, 05:12 PM

not bad at all, get a bass line and i approve of your song

im always a sucker for strings

edit- link is gone btw

Ego Tripping · 11-08-2009, 05:33 PM

I find the intro a bit long.

Sir-Ex · 11-08-2009, 05:40 PM

hey dude wanna post you song again?

Black · 11-08-2009, 07:14 PM

YouTube - Slow Jam by Ryan Moyer

Sir-Ex · 11-08-2009, 07:22 PM

Do you have an mp3 or wav version? I'll lay a bass line on top of that if you want.

Black · 11-08-2009, 10:36 PM

its in the works thanks though

Ego Tripping · 11-08-2009, 10:38 PM

It's midi-tasctic.

Black · 11-08-2009, 10:44 PM

what does that mean?

Mydriasis · 11-08-2009, 10:48 PM

Those strings are actually legit. What programs are you using?

I love a long intro. I think you cut it at just the right time. I can get into this kind of shit.

Black · 11-08-2009, 10:56 PM

reason 4.
i love strings, they put me in the loving mood.

Mercury · 11-08-2009, 10:57 PM

i don't think there are enough key changes.

Black · 11-08-2009, 11:07 PM

a friend mentioned the same thing, good ears. switching up the key on a bridge would be useful.

**Mafoo** · 11-08-2009, 11:59 PM

very nice

Sir-Ex · 11-09-2009, 06:02 AM

Dude I wouldn't switch up the key, given the song you want to keep that whole thing in the same one, but do switch up the progression a bit for a bridge for sure.

**Mafoo** · 11-09-2009, 05:47 PM

i thought the same thing when they mentioned a key change. id just either change up the progesh slightly at one point, or switch of the rhythm a bit.

i think it sounds pretty damn good how it is. needs maybe a bass line or some vocals or something to bring it all together.

Black · 11-09-2009, 07:13 PM

thanks guys and girls

m0rb1d · 11-10-2009, 02:23 PM

i like the strings.

11-08-2009, 02:55 PM	#1 (permalink)
Black YaHookan Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 725 Thanks: 314 Thanked 287 Times in 184 Posts	my new song please tell me what you think, any feedback is appreciated. im aware the intro is long, i dont care thats how i want it __________________ formality known as higherlearner84, la coka nostra and finding balance. Last edited by Black; 11-08-2009 at 03:43 PM.

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Waves Duderino Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: chiburbs Posts: 15,475 Thanks: 991 Thanked 4,021 Times in 2,219 Posts	not bad at all, get a bass line and i approve of your song im always a sucker for strings edit- link is gone btw __________________ On this life that we call home The years go fast and the days go so slow

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Ego Tripping Are you in? Join Date: Jan 2004 Posts: 13,461 Thanks: 229 Thanked 657 Times in 438 Posts	I find the intro a bit long. __________________ God appears, and God is light, To those poor souls who dwell in night; But does a human form display To those who dwell in realms of day.

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Sir-Ex Learner Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Edmonton, Alberta Posts: 10,465 Thanks: 1,411 Thanked 3,130 Times in 1,873 Posts	hey dude wanna post you song again? __________________ Smile Ditch the cigs!!!!!!

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Sir-Ex Learner Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Edmonton, Alberta Posts: 10,465 Thanks: 1,411 Thanked 3,130 Times in 1,873 Posts	Do you have an mp3 or wav version? I'll lay a bass line on top of that if you want. __________________ Smile Ditch the cigs!!!!!!

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Ego Tripping Are you in? Join Date: Jan 2004 Posts: 13,461 Thanks: 229 Thanked 657 Times in 438 Posts	It's midi-tasctic. __________________ God appears, and God is light, To those poor souls who dwell in night; But does a human form display To those who dwell in realms of day.

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Mydriasis Do Not Resuscitate Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 1,317 Thanks: 840 Thanked 431 Times in 298 Posts	Those strings are actually legit. What programs are you using? I love a long intro. I think you cut it at just the right time. I can get into this kind of shit. __________________ ۞

11-08-2009, 10:56 PM	#11 (permalink)
Black YaHookan Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 725 Thanks: 314 Thanked 287 Times in 184 Posts	reason 4. i love strings, they put me in the loving mood. __________________ formality known as higherlearner84, la coka nostra and finding balance.

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Mercury Special Delivery Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: The States Posts: 8,190 Thanks: 294 Thanked 799 Times in 537 Posts	i don't think there are enough key changes.

11-08-2009, 11:07 PM	#13 (permalink)
Black YaHookan Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 725 Thanks: 314 Thanked 287 Times in 184 Posts	a friend mentioned the same thing, good ears. switching up the key on a bridge would be useful. __________________ formality known as higherlearner84, la coka nostra and finding balance.

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Mafoo nice daze Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: the anguish of anticipated transformation Posts: 5,962 Thanks: 3,491 Thanked 2,356 Times in 1,540 Posts	very nice __________________ PLUR For once you have tasted flight you will walk the earth with your eyes turned skywards, for there you have been and there you will long to return

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Sir-Ex Learner Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Edmonton, Alberta Posts: 10,465 Thanks: 1,411 Thanked 3,130 Times in 1,873 Posts	Dude I wouldn't switch up the key, given the song you want to keep that whole thing in the same one, but do switch up the progression a bit for a bridge for sure. __________________ Smile Ditch the cigs!!!!!!

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Mafoo nice daze Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: the anguish of anticipated transformation Posts: 5,962 Thanks: 3,491 Thanked 2,356 Times in 1,540 Posts	i thought the same thing when they mentioned a key change. id just either change up the progesh slightly at one point, or switch of the rhythm a bit. i think it sounds pretty damn good how it is. needs maybe a bass line or some vocals or something to bring it all together. __________________ PLUR For once you have tasted flight you will walk the earth with your eyes turned skywards, for there you have been and there you will long to return

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