red

vanilla · 03-08-2009, 04:05 PM

push me through the wire
let it fall down
and crumble

youre breath is
my life source
exhale and live
through me

how sweet this is
mortality
youre words touch upon
these impossible dreams
like childhood memories

dont let them go
hold them close
and truth...
truer eyes there haven't been
like mazes of purity

inhale
like the scent of beauty
exhale and breathe
life into me

Mercury · 03-08-2009, 04:10 PM

Conservatively abstract... A yearning for a woman's grace, I gather? I can dig it.

vanilla · 03-08-2009, 04:13 PM

thanks man
more like a memory of it though, heh

Grieves · 03-08-2009, 04:24 PM

middle stanza was rly good, great work nil

vanilla · 03-09-2009, 12:14 PM

thanks for reading

Mikey · 03-11-2009, 12:18 PM

good shit, i really liked it

penny fl*me · 04-06-2009, 02:13 PM

You had me at the second stanza Vanilla, I really loved the third one too! Did you ever give her the poem?

vanilla · 04-06-2009, 09:26 PM

holy irony, just showed her 2 seconds ago...

03-08-2009, 04:05 PM	#1 (permalink)
vanilla the cunning linguist Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: 514 Posts: 5,349 Thanks: 11 Thanked 137 Times in 92 Posts	red push me through the wire let it fall down and crumble youre breath is my life source exhale and live through me how sweet this is mortality youre words touch upon these impossible dreams like childhood memories dont let them go hold them close and truth... truer eyes there haven't been like mazes of purity inhale like the scent of beauty exhale and breathe life into me __________________

03-08-2009, 04:13 PM	#3 (permalink)
vanilla the cunning linguist Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: 514 Posts: 5,349 Thanks: 11 Thanked 137 Times in 92 Posts	thanks man more like a memory of it though, heh __________________

03-08-2009, 04:24 PM	#4 (permalink)
Grieves The Worst Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: Interstate 8 Posts: 12,077 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 2,552 Thanked 3,110 Times in 1,708 Posts	middle stanza was rly good, great work nil __________________ "And no matter what they said dollar is not your friend and it's the feelings that are hard to know are the feelings that all come slow No matter what they said dollar is not your friend and these feelings that so hard to know are the feelings that wont let go No don't let go, till you find a home World Unite and I'll love you forever"

03-09-2009, 12:14 PM	#5 (permalink)
vanilla the cunning linguist Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: 514 Posts: 5,349 Thanks: 11 Thanked 137 Times in 92 Posts	thanks for reading __________________

03-11-2009, 12:18 PM	#6 (permalink)
Mikey Seasoned YaHookan Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: gulf islands bc Posts: 7,443 Thanks: 1,144 Thanked 2,246 Times in 1,475 Posts	good shit, i really liked it __________________ RIP Gov

03-08-2009, 04:10 PM	#2 (permalink)
Mercury Special Delivery Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: The States Posts: 8,150 Thanks: 294 Thanked 801 Times in 539 Posts	Conservatively abstract... A yearning for a woman's grace, I gather? I can dig it.

04-06-2009, 02:13 PM	#7 (permalink)
penny fl*me YaHookan Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Canada Posts: 10 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	You had me at the second stanza Vanilla, I really loved the third one too! Did you ever give her the poem?

04-06-2009, 09:26 PM	#8 (permalink)
vanilla the cunning linguist Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: 514 Posts: 5,349 Thanks: 11 Thanked 137 Times in 92 Posts	holy irony, just showed her 2 seconds ago... __________________

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