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Do Not Resuscitate
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The One You Want
Swimming on the lake's tide,
the saline scent of water being boiled by the sun. This never ending battle shows me my place. As if God came into my iris to show me it's face. We've all felt the vastness of nothing, and we live our hardest to become something, but in the end there is only one thing. That is everything. What does any of it mean? Sky so blue, and grass so green, dreams are forever, but life so lean. With every perfect detail, down to the tiniest of beings. Each perfection so worthy of seeing. You are infinitely blessed, if your can open up your chest, and never let your heart rest. We must love everything. Every perfection is worthy of seeing, Never invest in nothing, Because we're all something, Only all together, are we everything. <3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3
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UglyDucklingSyndrome
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Nice! I really like it.
I do think the second from last paragraph's rhymes are kinda cheesy though. And there is a spelling mistake in there too. |
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Do Not Resuscitate
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hehe yeah I've been going really simple lately. Cuz I find when I write with better words less people care to read let alone read into it.
I am not a good speller I'll work on it! Thanks for reading!
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