When You Say "Free"

Bearsy · 07-23-2010, 02:00 AM

when you say
"free"
do you mean
the kind
where one can
openly
and happily
be
whatever
one wants to be?
or do you mean
the kind
where one has
to wait in line
and step in time
and smile
blindly?
because to me
that isn't free,
that isn't how
i want to be

**Pharm Girl** · 07-23-2010, 03:28 AM

there's a part 2...eh??

do tell more about the wait in line.....and the blind smile....

**mothernature** · 07-23-2010, 05:02 AM

Bearsy, that's really good. I like it alot.

Bearsy · 07-23-2010, 08:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pharm Girl

there's a part 2...eh??

do tell more about the wait in line.....and the blind smile....

There's no part two yet... I was thinking about doing one though. We'll see.

Quote:

Originally Posted by mothernature

Bearsy, that's really good. I like it alot.

Thank you

The_Jester · 07-23-2010, 04:00 PM

I dig it bearsy brother! Simple but a cool flow.

Keep it up!

Bearsy · 07-23-2010, 06:53 PM

Thanks man, it was my first attempt at like a beat-style poem.
It's not really long enough to be beat, but I focused on the structure a lot more than I normally do.

07-23-2010, 03:28 AM	#2 (permalink)
Pharm Girl Weeding the Garden.~ Join Date: Feb 2006 Posts: 4,540 Blog Entries: 13 Thanks: 3,003 Thanked 1,176 Times in 894 Posts	there's a part 2...eh?? do tell more about the wait in line.....and the blind smile.... __________________ .....The Time has Come to 'Walk the Talk'.....~ ......A message for ALL from the Deer Tribe...~ It is a great journey — but you must do the walking and have the willingness to change and make the leap into the next level of human evolution. Become an inquisitive free thinking individual that takes responsibility for your life and the spiritual accountability to live life to the fullest. *Fuck the Monkeys*

07-23-2010, 04:00 PM	#5 (permalink)
The_Jester The Fool Join Date: May 2010 Posts: 365 Thanks: 239 Thanked 178 Times in 98 Posts	I dig it bearsy brother! Simple but a cool flow. Keep it up! __________________ In LOVING kindness, The forum fool.

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07-23-2010, 05:02 AM	#3 (permalink)
mothernature ancientbongmaster Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Kentucky Posts: 1,232 Thanks: 1,201 Thanked 809 Times in 487 Posts	Bearsy, that's really good. I like it alot.

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